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April 9th, 2013 06:36 PM #11
The idea/concept is there and she sort of gives a framework for an argument but doesn't follow through, makes suggestions, but doesn't go into detail.
It's a little like a quick brainstorm of initial thoughts about a subject/topic, that will turn into a full essay. It reminds me a bit of a University tutorial discussion. Needs fleshing out.
Edit: lol, what i wrote sounds like something said tutorial leader would give as feedback!Leo Sebastian l Ronan Alexander
April 9th, 2013 06:39 PM #13
Except the writer didn't actually say that, she wanted you to say it for her.
To be honest I loathe this writing style, which probably doesn't help matters. It's faux-colloquial, like you're two besties having a chat, and the author can't be bothered to put all her brilliant thoughts into a cohesive, formal, serious post/piece (but if she buckled down and did it, it would be *awesome,* you can be assured). I think it shows a lot of timidity, like "it's better not to try, than to try and fail."
I liked the intro and the snark, especially the lady bit cookies, but she immediately diverted into staving off detractors and then everything fell flat. The readers ended up drawing conclusions and inferring her points, and I'll restate, she never bothered to make any real arguments, even though I think we can all get her thesis and probably agree with it.XY: Antoine Raphael (3.1.2012)
XX: Cassia Viviane Noor (11.30.2013)
April 9th, 2013 06:40 PM #15
April 9th, 2013 06:40 PM #17
That is true!Ladies: Holly|Storm|Lily|Juno|Indy|Zoe
April 9th, 2013 06:40 PM #19
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